Friday, July 20, 2012

55: Brothers

I watched his body fall, and he, helpless, flailed uselessly into the canyon. For the first several meters, his eyes begged mine for a reason, but we both understood why this was happening. I could still smell the burning fat and flesh, feel the deep shame of rejection...

From behind, someone called to me: “Cain?”
* * * * *
FFF-55 Vol. XL. Tell a story in exactly fifty-five words. Go see G-Man.

12 comments:

  1. "Am I my brother's keeper?" I'm sure God knew the story.

    ReplyDelete
  2. wow. scalding stuff. very effective 55!

    ReplyDelete
  3. The emotion in 55 words is strong. The voice from behind made the hairs on my neck rise.

    ReplyDelete
  4. The emotion in 55 words is strong. The voice from behind made the hairs on my neck rise.

    ReplyDelete
  5. Linc...
    A 55 of Biblical proportions!!!
    Most excellent job My Friend.
    Thanks for playing, thanks for your support
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End

    ReplyDelete
  6. Oh my good surprise! -it is tough sometimes to make things short :)

    ReplyDelete
  7. Like the short biblical story and picture too ~

    Very nice share ~

    ReplyDelete
  8. oh nice retelling of this one...and the rest is history or our bloodline...

    ReplyDelete
  9. hook just grabs you right up and drops you over the canyon rim, but you saved a good punch for the end.

    ReplyDelete