When she said it, the universe stopped. The bottom dropped out from under the life I’d been building, we’d been building, for the last twenty years. My soul shuddered, and nothing else in the room existed—there were no sounds, no people chatting at tables, no waitresses in their smart white shirts. It was over.
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FFF-55 Vol. VIII. Tell a story in exactly 55 words. Go see G-Man.
dang...yeah...the world just came to an end...and the question then becomes can we get it moving again....
ReplyDeleteshocking result shake you,
ReplyDeleteI see it happen, very fine tuned story line,
it feels like a movie clip...
keep it up.
fantastic 55.
:)
Everything comes to a crashing halt. I fet the weight of her announcement.
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ReplyDeletePowerful writing My Friend.
Most Excellent 55.
You stirred up some emotion with this one.
Great Job
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Perfect, wish I'd written this.
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent! A perfect 55.
ReplyDeleteYou really do this 55 thing well. I went back and read your previous 55s. I am so impressed. You tell a complete and engaging story in so few words.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the kind words. The 55's are a blast; I absolutely plan to continue writing them, and will stop by and read others'.
ReplyDeleteOh woww!! Very powerful and effective writing, my friend... A story that began and ended... just like that! (sigh)
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